I think this gag hangs on the fact that Vachel points out that despite the gag, you the reader are still bored by it. Hopefully it hangs it well and not by the gallows.
I’ll be in Albuquerque this weekend! Stop by! I’ll have Little Dee Books as well as my smiling personality. :)
I think sound effects are somewhat like poetry. They work best if you actually read them out loud.